Thursday, March 14, 2013

Jack at the swimming pool

One afternoon Jack and dad went in the car to go swimming pool because it was a hot day. Suddenly the car stopped. Jack and dad had to walk in the pool. When he got to the pool it was warm he had fun swimming. After that he got out of the pool and went home with dad. They got home Jack went for a run with his dog Max. Soon they came back Jack and mum went shopping to buy some dog foods for Max. Later they got home Jack went to sleep and his dad said “Goodnight Jack.”



  1. Hello Htawara
    I was reading your writing about swimming I really liked it.Well done I really like the picture you drawed.

  2. Htawara,
    I think that is a wonderful story you told. The picture is very good. Keep up the good work!

  3. Htawara

    Your story is very good so keep up the work

  4. Hello, Htawara!

    My name is Brittney and I am a EDM310 student at the University of South Alabama.

    I really enjoyed reading your story. It sounds like Jack had a great time spending the day with his dad. Make sure to use commas and conjunctions to connect parts of sentences. Other than that, your post looks great! Keep on writing!



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